What a Great Logline Looks Like: July 2016 Edition

The July Logline Competition results are in! Check out these great examples of how to write a logline:


Our winner is Matthew Barker with his logline for AS IT IS…, a half-hour pilot:

“After eons of bickering, God and Satan’s staff strip them of their powers and banish them to the Midwest where they must learn to get along as a middle-aged husband and wife or be stuck together forever.”

What a fun twist on the family sit-com! This feels like an updated version of All In the Family, except Archie Bunker is actually the devil. We’d definitely watch this.

About Matthew (matthew@matthewbarker.com.au – Website – @MatthewRWBarker – Facebook)

Matthew Barker is an Australian screenwriter with two features in development.  Since winning the Australian Writers’ Guild’s “What’s Love Got To Do With It?” national screenwriting competition for his feature script OUT OF NOWHERE, he has had other work place well in international competitions and programs, including being shortlisted in the Australians in Film Gateway LA Screenplay Program 2015 for the script TROY TOWN.  That script was a quarter- and semi-finalist in The Blood List’s 2014 New Blood Screenwriting Contest, shortlisted in Stage32’s 2015 Happy Writers Screenplay Contest, and also shortlisted in the 2015 Spotlight Screenplay Contest.  In 2015, Matthew was hired by Stu Levy at TokyoPop (executive producer of “Priest” starring Paul Bettany and Cam Gigandet) to write the big screen adaptation of the graphic novel series The Dreaming by Queenie Chan.


First, we have Shane Weisfeld with his logline for KIDNAPPED, a thriller:

“A painkiller-addicted detective jeopardizes his family and job in his frantic search for a young boy whose kidnapper vows to keep him for ten years or kill him immediately if law enforcement pursues.”

This takes a pretty standard thriller concept and adds an exciting new twist. The dilemma Shane creates is instantly intriguing, which is exactly what you want in a great logline.

About Shane (sweisfeld@hotmail.com)

Shane Weisfeld is a screenwriter based in Toronto. He is the writer of the 2014 crime-thriller Freezer, starring Dylan McDermott and Peter Facinelli. He has placed as a runner-up in Script Magazine’s competition, a semi-finalist in the PAGE Awards, and has been interviewed on Scripts & Scribes, Tom Benedek’s Screenwriting Master Class, by Lee Jessup, and on other websites, publications, and podcasts.

Next, we have Kimberly Jade Tompkins with her logline for CARROW, a faith-based drama:

“After his release from prison for the the accidental killing of his closest friend, a hardened loner who cares for nothing but his sick daughter must choose between letting her die or a life of violent crime to pay for her care.”

This logline sets up an impossible challenge that audiences should instantly be able to relate to — what wouldn’t you do to save your child? It’s gripping, compelling, and concise.

About Kimberly (kimberlytompkins@yahoo.com – @kimberlyjade27 – Facebook)

Kimberly Jade Tompkins is a screenwriter from Birmingham, AL, currently living in Los Angeles.  Most recently, she was a co-writer for the upcoming feature film, Tinker, starring Christian Kane and Clayne Crawford.  Kimberly has placed in a dozen screenwriting contests with various scripts.  Her recent short script, Our Dirty Laundry, won first place at the Sidewalk Film Festival and will be out of post production soon.


The August Logline Competition is now open! If you have an idea you’ve been waiting to get feedback on, don’t wait much longer. After the August competition, we’ll be taking both September and October off so that Angela can have a baby! She and her husband are expecting a boy at the end of September. Send good vibes their way!

As for the August Logline Competition, we have wonderful prizes from Script Pipeline, Virtual Pitchfest, WeScreenplay, and Talentville. Get your loglines in for detailed feedback and a chance at great prizes.

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